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With the recent improvements to internet, people can leave views or pinions on certain goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing? Discuss both, giving your own answer with examples.

#improvements #internet #people #pinions #goods #services
In
this
 modern
area
a period marked by distinctive character or reckoned from a fixed point or event
era
, people purchase many goods or products for their everyday life and they think that it is better to leave the comments or reviews about the
product
 they have purchased. I think it is a positive thing to share our own opinion.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 provides
wide range
Suggestion
a wide range
 of information. The primary reason people purchase products is
o
in the direction of
to
so
no
on
 reduce the burden. Consumers are providing
wide range
Suggestion
a wide range
 of products in the market.
However
, customers can purchase and
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the
product
 for their needs. While sharing their feedback and that would have really helpful for other customers to buy the
product
.
For example
, recently my friend ordered a mobile phone from amazon and he was really overwhelmed because the
product
 works amazing. He immediately he shared his comment on the website.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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