The percentage of overweight children in Western society has increased by almost 20% in the last 10 years. Discuss the causes and effects of this trend.
Nowadays the portion of outsize kids westward civilization has increasingly risen by approaching one fifth during the period of the
last
10 years. There are such
many reasons for this
.
Firstly
, children who are obese enjoy eating fast food
such
as burgers, pizzas, and French fries which can cause obesity and heart diseases. These food
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contains
a large amount of cholesterol that can lead to the buildup of plaque in artery walls. Another factor is laziness. Most Suggestion
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children especially
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children, especially
teenagers are
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food
. This
may likely result in corpulence. Chubby kids not
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eat a balanced diet but
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diet, but
also
consume sufficient quantities of different kinds of food
. They may not eat vegetables and some fruit which can not
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food
which are high in protein. They eat too much cholesterol but
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cholesterol, but
food
and sweet food
is not very healthy as this
can be deposited on the walls of arteries, causing them to become blocked. Overweight children can catch many serious health problems such
as diabeter
, high blood pressure, and even cancer. They can be bullied at school, teased by all their friends. a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
As a result
, they become worried and don’t want to go to school anymore.
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