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some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. what are the causes? suggest possible solutions

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Some business organisations are discovering that their new employees do not possess basic interpersonal skills required in their
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work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
. I believe
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 is majorly a result of the effect of high social media use in our society and inadequate life skills training in schools and tertiary institutions. It would require a collective effort from employers and education agencies to tackle
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 issue.
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, the increase in poor interpersonal skills among workers is directly a result of the general breakdown of human interaction with our environment due to increased time spent on social media technologies. People now spend more time communication over digital devices
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 as game forums, dating sites or blogs than they do actually spend time with real people.
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 has an adverse effect on how we relate
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 individuals in the real world and of course would influence the way
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 persons
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 in the organisations.
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,
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schools, place
 little emphasis on soft skills
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 as
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work but
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work, but
 focus mainly on delivering technical knowledge to their students. They make their institutions too competitive and as
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team
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 building and
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work
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 cannot be learned in
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 environments. Students would eventually get hired due to their technical know-how but will not be able to
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 well with their co-workers. They may take every assignment to be a competition. In order to solve
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 problem, two things should be done.
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, business owners should ensure that new hires are not only employed because of their technical
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ability, but
 the prospective employee should be able to showcase his or her soft skills too. They can
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 send staff on seminars to improve on it.
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, prioritising
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 building exercises in their curriculum would help a lot. In conclusion, the use of social media technology nowadays has reduced intercommunication and future employees are not learning
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 skills in their learning institutions. The solutions
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therefore lies
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therefore lie
 in employers honing it in their workers and for
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 institutions to include it in their activities.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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