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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

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In the recent years, the education expenditure has been
focus
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focused
focusing
 on scientific subjects like Technology or Math rather than History and Literature. In my perspective, it is a positive development for the education system.
This
 essay will present the vital role of Science subjects in modern society as well as its standing in the modern employment.
Firstly
, Science subjects have gained crucial role in modern society.
For example
, technology has integrated
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 every
aspects
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aspect
 of life, from work, entertainment, navigation and fitness. The need to understand how technology work becomes imperative. Another example is the field of biology. Biology has advanced so much
from
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since
 the dawn of time. People nowadays have the ability to understand the surround environment much better than before.
Furthermore
, a good knowledge of the world of Science will provide a better chance of employments for students. In a report by
Department
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the Department
 of
Labor
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Labour
, over 70 percent of
employments
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employment
 are related to the field of Science.
Moreover
, the knowledge of Science could be helpful to people in other areas like Art or History. A good understanding of Geography might help historians to explain
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 historical phenomenon which affected deeply mankind. Modern art nowadays is no longer being restricted on the canvas. Various kinds of art being introduced are the cooperation between the traditional art and modern technology like the 3D printing sculptures or 3D printing dresses. In conclusion, studying Science subject helps youngsters in everyday life tasks and a better chance for
future career
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future careers
a future career
. It is my firm belief that the allocation fund to Science subjects are justified.
Submitted by Thanh on

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