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Some people say students of different age groups in school should be put in the same class? What is your opinion?

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Some people believe that
students
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 of different ages should be taught in the same
class
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. I certainly disagree with
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 idea as the learning capacity of
students
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 varies with
age
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. Older children have higher cognitive skills which make it possible for them to grasp advanced concepts relatively easily.
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, a
ten year old
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ten-year-old
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 can grasp things more easily than a
five year old
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five-year-old
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 and
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 if they are taught together neither will benefit. If the lessons are tweaked to suit the learning capacity of the younger
students
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, the older
students
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 will gain nothing from attending the
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.
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, if the lessons are designed for the seniors in the
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, the juniors will not understand anything. In short, neither will benefit from
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 arrangement. Another disadvantage of teaching
students
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 of different ages in the same
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 is that it will unnecessarily expose the juniors in the
class
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 to the bad habits of seniors.
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 a survey in the UK revealed that 80% of young
students
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 are bullied by seniors and are forced to try drugs in schools.
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 peer pressure can push a child into various illegal activities which they will not commit if they are studying with
students
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 of their
age
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.
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, putting
students
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 of different ages in the same
class
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 is not a good idea, as it can affect a child’s learning skills and may
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 expose them to things that are not appropriate for their
age
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.
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, it is recommended that schools consider the
age
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while
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 enrolling
students
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 into different classes.

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