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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays,
education
 is considered as a passport to the future. People find academic degrees as essential milestones for future success while others believe that apart from
education
 there are other relevant factors which are crucial as well. I take the opinion that success cannot be guaranteed by conventional
education
. Primarily, academic institutes of all levels teach general concepts and have a multi-disciplinary approach in imparting
education
.
However
, life is very subjective and despite studying in the same classroom, individuals opt for various career paths. Some sort of specialization or experience is required to become the breadwinner for the family.  To understand
this
, let us consider students in engineering and medical institutes who learn theory and understand the general scientific concepts, but it is an apprenticeship program or assistance to some
seniors
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenarios
 which makes them job-ready.
Secondly
, the most important skill for a recruit, post higher studies
is
Suggestion
have been
 his ability to learn and apply knowledge. Learning is a never-ending process and it has been validated by Harvard Business Review. They have validated the difference between
prosperous
Suggestion
prosperity
prospering
 and normal graduates, wherein the former never cease to invest in new skills.
Furthermore
, there are a variety of online courses available to hone the skills after completion of formal
education
. To encapsulate, I would suggest that apart from formal
education
, a certain degree of capability is required to shine in every field. It is rightly said that a successful person never loses, they either win or learn.
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