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With the recent improvement to internet ,people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services they have purchased.Is it a good or a bad thing, Discuss both giving your opinion with examples.

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People are expressing their thoughts and feelings connecting with
internet
 and technological devices about the product that they have bought in recent times.Posting comments on
purchased
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purchasing
 goods have both negative and positive effect on consumers and producers. From my perspective, sharing experience on
internet
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the internet
 through social networking sites brings positive attitude towards products through which vendor and
vendee
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Vendee
 both will be benefited;
however
,
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,
 the negativity may down the market in a
second
. Commenting on their own desired products have become an increasingly popular norm among people as
internet
 is available all the time
.
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.
In fact
,
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,
 It is good that products which they had wanted to buy.
Besides
 that they would
also
 come to that whether it is suitable product for them or not.
Furthermore
, they do not need to search the shop to buy that product and can save
time
objective case of they
them
 from
unnecessary burgain
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the unnecessary burden
unnecessary burden
.
Moreover
, producer will be
encourage
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encouraged
 to produce
such
 kinds of products which have been appreciated by the customers.
Therefore
, leaving some feedbacks on the products which people bought on
internet
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the internet
,
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,
 is invariably useful.
Conversly
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Conversely
, if the same desired products of customer proved to be unproductive and fruitless, people would write atrocious or negative comments on the products on social networking sites
.
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.
As a result
,
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,
for example
,
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,
 the industries may
go to astray
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go astray
 in order to their
bad
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worst
production which
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production, which
 is unable to satisfy the need of people
.
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.
In addition
,
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,
 there will be an adverse effect on other
consummers
a person who uses goods or services
consumers
consumer
 who could have shown unwilling attitude to buy those products which had been
varified
proved to be true
verified
, sealed and banned
.
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.
Hence
,
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,
 it will hamper not only the goodwill of the
company but
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company, but
 it will comments on the products on Facebook, Twitter, Skype
,
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 and so on
,
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 to name but a few would move the root of
organization
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the organization
. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would say that it is true that
internet
 helps people to say their opinion on certain types of products after using it
.
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.
In contrast
,
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,
 it has both negative and positive sites since it is seen by the public who may accept it viewing outstanding comment or may reject it
.
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.
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