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Job satisfaction is more important than high wages. Do you agree or disagree ?

#job #satisfaction #wages
It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a
job
 with high wage, even if it
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mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
 not appeal to you. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think that
job
satisfaction
 is much more crucial
then
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than
 salary.
First
 of all, I believe that
job
satisfaction
give
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gives
 people a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 that no money can guarantee. Pursing one interests will bring pleasure and
feeling
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a feeling
 of
satisfaction
.
For instance
, a lot of famous researchers made their
career choice not
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career choice, not
 because of appealing
wages but
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wages, but
 because they are more passionate about science.
That
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That's
 why it’s more important to choose the kind of work that makes you
happy
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happier
 than that of high wages.
Secondly
, doing what you like always keep you motivated and leads to career growth. There is strong relationships between
job
satisfaction
 and productivity. People who love their
job
 can easily expert in their fields and achieve better results because of hardworking and dedication towards the
job
.
For instance
, Henry Miller
leave
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leaves
 his
job
despite of a good
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despite a good
wages
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wage
 and ventured to become a writer. After enduring years up and down, he
become
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becomes
 one of the most famous and well paid authors of
20th century
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the 20th century
.
Thus
,
advantageous
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advantage
 of
job
 that keep you satisfied
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
outweighs
 the drawback of a low salary in a long term perspective. To sum up, I believe
job
satisfaction
 is beneficial than high wages because it makes people happy and motivated..
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