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Some people think that now a days children have too much freedom. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #freedom
The world is changing fast and so are the rules and the norms of society. I agree with the statement that
today
's children enjoy much more independence than children of the past. A number of arguments surround my opinion. The main reason why children
today
 are enjoying more
freedom
 is that their parents realise that children
today
 are capable of deciding things on their own.
Today
's children have the power of the internet and the satellite tv in their hands.
Today
's young generation is the most well informed generation than ever in the history of mankind. Because of the
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being or occurring at an advanced period of time or after a usual or expected time
late
light
 boom,
today
's children grow up quicker than their parents did. They know what their parents and grandparents do not know. So, parents give their children the
freedom
 to make decisions on their own.
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Suggestion
In
On
Lie-in
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 the past, children were not exposed to so much
information
Suggestion
inform
, and so meekly did what their parents told them to do. Another important reason behind the
freedom
 given to
today
's children is that parents don't have time to monitor their children's activities.
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Suggestion
In
On
With
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 the fast paced world of
today
, both parents are working longer hours to meet the demands of the consumerist society of
today
. They are not working just to fulfil their basic necessities, but
also
 to live a lifestyle of luxury and comfort. As a consequence, children are left unattended to enjoy their
freedom
. Earlier, only one parent worked and mothers were there to supervise their children. Workaholic culture was
also
 not there and people worked limited hours.
Furthermore
, the change in family structure from joint to nuclear families is responsible for the
freedom
 showered on
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today's
 children. Earlier, grandparents were there to keep a watchful eye on their grandchildren, but
today
's children do not have
such
 supervision
on
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of
 them,
as a result
 of which they get a lot of
freedom
. To sum up, it can be reiterated that the
freedom
 enjoyed by
today
's children is, by and large, inevitable The onus is on the parents to see to it that
this
 excess
freedom
 does not go against their children.
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