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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.other.believe that school is a place to learn this. discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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's family should teach to become a good man. o
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 say it is the duty of schools as children spent a lot of time in
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, but in my opinion, both have their responsibility for a
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. as students spent most of their time in
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,so it is up to teacher how teach them so they can become good person in future , in spite of only focus on study om theory-based they should make some practical class for student their they can share thoughts about thighs like what they want to become or what they like according to that they teach student so they have interest in study as
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 year survey had done my university of Chicago that if student has interest in subjects they are likely to be master of that subject in future which mean they can earn livelihood without any difficulty so which is their part in society.
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the other hand, some people think that it can be told what
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 become based on their parents mean if one h
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children
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 's mind that drugs are cool so they do not need to worry about anything and they drop
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 after some time which means they can not get any job so they have to r
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 should make some kind of department where they can take one class in a week for some kind of m
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motivating
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 become excited to do good in their
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 parents should aware that their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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