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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.other.believe that school is a place to learn this. discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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It
is considered by some people that a
child
's family should teach to become a good man. o
ther,
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Other
 say it is the duty of schools as children spent a lot of time in
school
, but in my opinion, both have their responsibility for a
child
. as students spent most of their time in
school
,so it is up to teacher how teach them so they can become good person in future , in spite of only focus on study om theory-based they should make some practical class for student their they can share thoughts about thighs like what they want to become or what they like according to that they teach student so they have interest in study as
last
 year survey had done my university of Chicago that if student has interest in subjects they are likely to be master of that subject in future which mean they can earn livelihood without any difficulty so which is their part in society.
o
n
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On
the other hand, some people think that it can be told what
child
 become based on their parents mean if one h
ave
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has
parents who are drug addict and do all stuff in f
rond
the side that is forward or prominent
front
of t
hey
of them or themselves
their
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ld
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oldest
older
c
hild
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children
it will be fit in
child
 's mind that drugs are cool so they do not need to worry about anything and they drop
school
 after some time which means they can not get any job so they have to r
obbery
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rob
for food or other expenses of
life
. i
n
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In
conclusion, a
school
 should make some kind of department where they can take one class in a week for some kind of m
otivate
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motivating
form that
child
 become excited to do good in their
life
, and
also
 parents should aware that their
life
 fight can e
ffets
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affect
affects
l
ife
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the life
of a
child
 so. t
hey
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They
should to their fight in a room from away from children. -
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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