Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There has been an increase in crime rate throughout the years.
there
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are the different causes of crime and various measures can be taken to prevent the increase in it. There can be countless reasons for rise in
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crimial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
activities. But it can be controlled by the
government
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by having a strict eye and rules for the public and
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
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the implementation of these rules and regulations is extremely necessary. In the terms of reasons of these crimes, there are countless reasons.
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as lack of education, lack of
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support, unemployment, use of drugs, other illegal
activties
any specific behavior
activities
etc. The rate of crime is more in underdeveloped or developing countries as compared to developed countries because they
dont
do not
don't
get their rights and
dont
do not
don't
have basic facilities of life which are essential for the survival. Unemployment and poverty is one of the main causes which leads people to do
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kind of things. Most of the people who are drug addict are youngsters and doing drugs requires a lot of
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money, which
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leads theses teenagers to do bad kinds
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of studying and working for their future.
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most of the criminals nowadays, are teenagers. In order to prevent theses activities,
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government
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the government
should have strict laws and
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provide financial supports to those who need it. Increasing
jobs
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job
opportunities would be really helpful, it will
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increase real capita income of a country. Having counselling sessions for teenagers would spread awareness among them about the harmful effects of drugs on them. Providing basic necessities of life to poor people would be beneficial as well because in
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way people won't feel the need of doing robbery and becoming a theft. Providing free education up to high school level will help kids in getting a better job
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of being
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uneducated and start doing other criminal
activites
any specific behavior
activities
for food. In conclusion, there are many reasons for doing criminal activities and these activities are increasing day by day. But it can
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be stopped by taking a strong action against it. In order to put a complete stop on these
activites
any specific behavior
activities
,
government
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support can play a major role IN helping the public in every way.

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