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People eat more processed food than they did in the past, why is this and what are the effects of this?

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In the 21st century, with the furtherance of
food
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 processing technology
,
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,
variety of packed
food
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 items are available to
general public
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the general public
. Easy to eat packed foods
also
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 known as fast foods, are
popular choice
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a popular choice
the popular choice
popular choices
 of public due to their fast availability and prolonged shelf-life. In
this
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 essay reasons for the trend of increased consumption of less nutritional and fortified foods to that of, the earlier times
is put
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are put
 forth. The native staple diets are getting replaced by junk items by due to fast pace and industrial culture.
it
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It
 has been observed that industrial
culture making
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culture, making
 life busier
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, working class prefers time-saving options for
food
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. The time-saving items are pre-mixed items, ready to cook, ready to serve packets and beverages for snacks and main meals.
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such
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Such
 variety of snacks and lunch options replace home-made
food
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 as well as tiffins at work as well.So with the modern life style and multiple meal options it is noted that the diet
have become
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has become
 more unhealthy than past. With the
food
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 processing to meet extended self-life and enhance convenience,
orignal
preceding all others in time or being as first made or performed
original
 diet traditions are vanishing along with health.
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,
food
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 processing makes natural
food
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 stuff to lose nutrition content during processing and
this
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 produces
food
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 with empty calories,
such
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 as potato chips.
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Secondly various
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Secondly, various
 processes make
food
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 less
organoleptic
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 and
this
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 compensated by
addition
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the addition
 of synthetic additives and pigments
such
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 as dyes and salts.Together empty calories and supplemental chemicals cause harm to vital organs as well as weight gain. With the more and
more inclusion
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more inclusive
 of
such
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 non-conventional in the diet it has become for common reason of health problems. In conclusion
,
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,
the unhealthy
diets
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diet
 habits and meal options altogether leads to various health complications and cost us well-being and money.
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