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Some people tell that to reduce the traffic and pollution, government should increase the tax on the petrol. Would there be more benefits than the drawback?

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In the modern society, traffic and
pollution
 have become a major problem. The government is coming up with various schemes to fight / tackle
this
 menace;
however
, there is no solution yet. A few people are of the opinion that increasing the tax on
petrol
 may help to improve the situation as
this
 measure will help to reduce the number of vehicles and the resultant air
pollution
. In my opinion,
this
 move will have more disadvantages than advantages.
Petrol
 plays a very important role when we count the factors that impact the economy. If the price of
petrol
 increases, it will affect the price of other commodities as well. Commodities need to be transported from place to place and when the cost of transportation increases, essential items will become
expensive making survival
Suggestion
expensive, making survival
an expensive making survival
an expensive making survival an expensive making survival
 difficult for the common man.
Also
, when oil prices increase, the public transport will
also
 become costlier.
The poor
Suggestion
The poorest
The poorer
 sections of the society will be the worst hit by
this
 measure because the hike in the price of
petrol
 will not deter the rich from driving their own vehicle.
Furthermore
, there is no guarantee that a drop in traffic will reduce air
pollution
. Automobiles are just one of the causes of
pollution
. There are various other factors
such
 as wildfires, the burning of crop residues, and factories. Serious measures need to be taken to control them. To conclude, after discussing the various factors contributing to
pollution
, it is not hard to say that
petrol
Suggestion
the petrol
 is not the only reason for all the problems. In my opinion,
petrol
 prices should not be increased as
this
 move will impact not only related sectors but
also
 the entire economy. Worse, it is unlikely to deliver the intended result.
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