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Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem.

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The three diagrams above imply that
music
 media develop continually. At a glance, we see some of
music
 media were widely-used for a tiny period and became far less popular or diminished in the end
such
 as Compact Disks,
Vinyl
 Records and especially Cassettes. In 1990, the Compact
Disk
 was used by the majority, but the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two media has broken out since 2000; when the Digital Audio appeared for the
first
 time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer being demanded by 2000. The
Vinyl
 Record totally disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010. To conclude, the Compact
Disk
 popularity grew up by 40
percent
 and
then
 fell off steeply by 60
percent
.
Also
, there was an increase in Digital Audio use within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of
Vinyl
 Record occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010. The three diagrams above imply that
music
 media develop continually. At a glance, we see some of
music
 media were widely-used for a tiny period and became far less popular or diminished in the end
such
 as Compact Disks,
Vinyl
 Records and especially Cassettes. In 1990, the Compact
Disk
 was used by the majority, but the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two media has broken out since 2000; when the Digital Audio appeared for the
first
 time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer being demanded by 2000. The
Vinyl
 Record totally disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010. To conclude, the Compact
Disk
 popularity grew up by 40
percent
 and
then
 fell off steeply by 60
percent
.
Also
, there was an increase in Digital Audio use within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of
Vinyl
 Record occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010

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