2. Some people say that rich country should give money to poor country. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The rich countries must give economic support to poorer countries to increase the standard of living in those countries. I partially agree with it as only that won’t compensate or increase GDP or standard of living. A
person
with a skill is more important than a skill less
person
with a hundred dollar as he, the skilled
person
may work hard and earn his living by himself, whereas the other
person
might use the borrowed
amount
and make his living for a month But if a hundred
dollar
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dollars
is given to a skilled
person
he will multiply the
amount
. Same goes with countries, if they are provided with only money the poverty will be eradicated for a short
amount
of time. But investing on the skilled labour or making the people skilled and
then
investing is a better course of action.
Although
, if the investments are intended on the skilled labour there are many more factors which influence it like government policies, transparency etc. If the investments are not used properly by corrupted political officials it will be like
transfering
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transferring
ice using bare hands. The way ice melts to water and the size reduces when it reaches the
last
person
the investments will fill the pockets of the corrupted officials. So the government should be transparent.
Although
the officials are not corrupt if
investment
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the investment
is utilised in an inefficient way the
amount
that is
donated will be of no use. Here is an example from a CEO of a corporate giant Ali Baba.” If you give money and banana to a monkey the monkey prefers banana to the latter as they don’t know how to use it.” Same goes to nations
also
if the money is not used effectively there won’t be any eradication of poverty.
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