Machines have replaced physical work in many industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Automatic machines have played an important role and replaced physical works in many industries.

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phenomenon’s

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outweigh its disadvantages. Since the machines can do lots of

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automatically, the working efficiency can be improved significantly. Since machines can work all the time without taking breaks

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industries can produce more products without taking breaks, and those industries can produce more products every day.

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, those machines’ works always reach the same

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standard, while

workers may make mistakes sometimes.

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lead to the fact that factories can produce better products than before.

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, the usage of machines can allow industries to produce products with less cost. Those industries don’t need so many workers as before after they use machines to replace the physical works.

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, the price of

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products will drop and citizens can get

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stuff with less money.

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since lots of machines have been put into the production of clothes

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the clothes sold in the market turn cheaper and most locals can afford to buy them and wear different kinds of clothes every day.

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the replacement of physical works can lead to the decrease of the employee numbers in the industries

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does not mean the employment rate will drop dramatically.

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because the locals can find better jobs by receiving

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education which can

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motivation to learn knowledge can improve the whole city’s civilization. Overall

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the using of machines in industries can bring far more advantages than disadvantages so that we should work hard to

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make or cause to be or to become

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more machines with different kinds of usage.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

279 words

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Machines have replaced physical work in many industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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