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Machines have replaced physical work in many industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Automatic machines have played an important role and replaced physical works in many industries.
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hold
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holds
 the side that
this
 phenomenon’s
advantages
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advantage
 outweigh its disadvantages. Since the machines can do lots of
works
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work
 automatically, the working efficiency can be improved significantly. Since machines can work all the time without taking breaks
,
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,
those
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these
 industries can produce more products without taking breaks, and those industries can produce more products every day.
Besides
, those machines’ works always reach the same
standard while
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standard, while
 workers may make mistakes sometimes.
This
 lead to the fact that factories can produce better products than before.
Moreover
, the usage of machines can allow industries to produce products with less cost. Those industries don’t need so many workers as before after they use machines to replace the physical works.
Therefore
, the price of
such
 products will drop and citizens can get
those
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this
 stuff with less money.
For example
,
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,
 since lots of machines have been put into the production of clothes
,
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,
 the clothes sold in the market turn cheaper and most locals can afford to buy them and wear different kinds of clothes every day.
Although
 the replacement of physical works can lead to the decrease of the employee numbers in the industries
,
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,
this
 does not mean the employment rate will drop dramatically.
That is
 because the locals can find better jobs by receiving
further
 education which can
helps
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help
 them gain new skills. And
such
 motivation to learn knowledge can improve the whole city’s civilization. Overall
,
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,
 the using of machines in industries can bring far more advantages than disadvantages so that we should work hard to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
created
 more machines with different kinds of usage.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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