Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Other think that adults life brings more happiest, in spite of great responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some individuals are of the opinion that teenage years are the cheerful times of most people's lives.
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other are in favour that adult
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creates more happiness, regarding of responsibility. In
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essay, I will discuss both sides of arguments and try to draw a conclusion.
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of all
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no doubt teenage years are most enjoyable
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of the
life
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time
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comes only once in
everyones
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life
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. In that
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period youth enjoyed every moment without worrying about anything.
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time
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adolescent didn't have any responsibilities.They need not worry about money or other
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struggles.
adolescent
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Adolescent
age is a
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when they are growing
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
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time
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everyone enjoyed their school
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, their study, and leisure
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. Somebody focuses on their study, they are not fully engaged
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in
doing work. In
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age juvenile does not have any responsibility,
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all people treat them with love and care. Youth
does not have complicated
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does not complicate
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they could only focus on their studies.
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, when some
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teen made mistakes
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all
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their parents and other people ignore it or without giving any punishment they give good advice to avoid mistakes.
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, some individuals have
common belief
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a common belief
the common belief
that adults age
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is
the happiest
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of
life
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. But
adults
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adult
adults'
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is surrounded with so many responsibilities. They have plethora of responsibility on their shoulders,
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adults are
every
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busy every time
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busy. If some mistake made by
adults
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adults, then
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they have penalty for it. Most adult people have work stress or job related issues. They engaged all
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to
finished
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finish
their task.They could not take any decision which is harmful to their family and community. They always treated as
responsible person
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a responsible person
responsible persons
responsible people
the responsible person
, no one ignore their mistakes.
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result they
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result, they
didn't enjoy their
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perfectly or how they want. To recapitulate
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although
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it is common thought teenage years are more cheerful, relaxing, enjoying
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of lives. Personally, I believe that adolescent enjoy their happiest
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more than the adults
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