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Some people say that most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cooperation
Current years, we have realized that so many urgent problems can be solved by multi- national cooperation.
Although
 it can’t be denied that it holds true to some issues, I think
this
 is not the perfect resolution for all urgent troubles. It’s obvious that cross-border cooperation has recently contributed to improve and reduce some global issues.
For example
, global warming calls for deeply concern from all nations and requests them to participate to reduce both tree cutting, gas emissions and plastic consumption.
However
, governments of every country should be responsible for their own internal issues. Every country understands clearly about what are their urgent problems and how priority level they set aside as their country’s goal.
Besides
, each nation has own culture and administration system, common global processes sometimes are unable to apply. Each government will revise their multinational agreements in applying progress, subjected to their nation’s conditions.
For example
 same- sex- marriage is opened and legalized in many countries, but it is still banned in others. In resume, international cooperation is truly important and paves the way for globalization, but each country should not rely mostly on foreign-aid but positively tackle their internal issues as their expectation.

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