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Buying things on the Internet such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
The
internet
 is one of the best
innovation
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innovations
 that has ever happened in mankind. In my own
opinion I
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opinion, I
 totally agree that the advantages of buying things on the
internet
 outweigh the disadvantages. There has been many
occassion
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occasions
occasion
 where I sat and wonder how generations before
internet
 survive and I couldn't find a better answer to it. I will go by listing some salient points to defend why the advantages of buying things online outweigh the disadvantages. I will
first
 and foremost use myself as an example. In 2015 when I got a job in
rural area
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rural areas
a rural area
, it was so hard for me to see the things I used to buy when I was in the urban area. One of the only option left for me is to make orders online for
anyuthing
an indefinite thing
anything
 I need and get
deleived
bring to a destination, make a delivery
delivered
 to my house. Buying things online
such
 as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming
order
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the order
 of the new generation and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 advantage is
erreneous
containing or characterized by error
erroneous
. People can now make orders for whatever they want
at
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in
 the comfort of their homes and office without the stress of thing
of
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about
 how to get it after
an
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a
 hectic work day. There
are
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is
 so much comfort that comes with making orders online
such
 as less stressful and sometimes cost effective. There was a time I
tyraveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 to Abuja and was still contemplating on if I should travel by road or
book
 a flight. It was
late
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later
 that I made up my mind to
book
 the flight and it was done at the comfort of my home through online. I imagine how it will have been if the
internet
 was not available to make
such
 order. I have seen
may
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 cases of people
lossing
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
losing
loosing
 their jobs/contract
as a result
 of not
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 able to meet up with an appointment that they couldn't
book
 their flight. The idea of buying things online
also
 help to save time and money
as
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at
 the time used to
vist
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visit
 the market, groceries or travel to
book
 for a ticket can be
use
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used
 for other productive things. In conclusion, I agree that buying things online has many advantages. Thank you

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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