"Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

It is commonly said that today’s

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are pressurized as were yesterday’s adults. That’s true in the sense that

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are facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening simply because of the

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demands of life, from the same perspectives, on humans in general.

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it is important that

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their age to become successful as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a balance between material and psychological growth. As the global village becomes more and more competitive

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, it becomes important for us to prepare for the fight, so to speak, earlier and earlier.

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is realized by all, which triggers societies to push their juveniles during their learning stage. The other thing

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pressure on

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is the lack

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institutional opportunities, especially in developing countries. Now, more than ever,

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are having to race each other

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the privilege of higher education.

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healthy competition is helpful for the psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race becomes more prominent than the objective. Of

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the objective of

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competing against each other ideally is

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the best out of themselves. But, very frequently, a child is compelled to compete

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better than the other.

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, the competition becomes a brawl rather than

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a sprint. To stop

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spiteful struggle among our young, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental institutions,

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as schools and colleges. Students must contest for academic betterment, not social supremacy.

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, parents should get proactively involved in promoting sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their own vengefulness in the lives of their

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social reformation the government must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success. 32 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLES - Band 9 The conclusion here is simple. The

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today are being put into a ‘

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survival-of-the fittest

’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do their best.

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untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more antagonistic.

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we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry.