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At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large amount numbers of young adults compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situatuion outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the number of young adults in the population of some countries is relatively large,
in contrast
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 with the number of older people. Even though,
this
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 will help a
country
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 to increase its workforce, but
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 will
also
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 lead to many problems. Despite lack of workforce is becoming the problem for many countries, some of them are suffering to balancing the population,
this
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 is the problem when the youth generation is much more higher than the old one,
this
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 may affect many sides of the
country
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,
such
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 as; political instability, economic instability.
This
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 is because when the older people are gone, the young adults may not mature enough to become the leaders of their
country
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.
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, there are the advantages of
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 situation, but if the
country
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 is not stable, it will lose itself to other states.
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, in the worst case the
country
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 will be in chaos, and more dangerous problems may occur,
such
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 as; civil war, riot,
this
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 will cause casualties and pain to many people. In conclusion, the advantages of
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 situation do not outweigh the disadvantages,
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, a government of the
country
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 should spend more effort in maintaining the population of the state,
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 will help the land to become more peaceful and the quality of life will increase.
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