Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (such as the environment). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Public
transport
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has become a basic necessity in small
as well as
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big cities. Many
people
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believe that
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governments should work on improving
transport
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mediums and invest in rapid
transport
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vehicles. In my opinion, I think every person wants
affordable
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an affordable
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and comfortable journey so regulators must spend some budget amount to develop
transport
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facilities.
This
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essay will discuss, why some
people
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think it is advantageous, and others
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do not
did not
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find it beneficial. To start with, if faster public
transport
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available
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is available
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,
then
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people
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might prefer it rather than using their own vehicle which will eventually lead to less traffic in the city. To state an example, after
Delhi
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the Delhi
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metro inception in city,
majority
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the majority
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of Delhi's citizens have stopped using personal cars to travel
instead
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now
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they use
metro
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the metro
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to reach their
destination
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destinations
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.
Additionally
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, if less traffic is there in any city
then
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pollution will be reduced.
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, significant improvement was observed in air quality when Delhi authorities
had
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applied
odd-even
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the odd-even
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rule which was to ban even
numbers
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number
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of car
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car
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cars
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on even
date
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dates
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and odd number
cars
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on odd dates.
Furthermore
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, rapid
transport
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will reduce travel time,
thus
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people
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's travelling to office will be
hassle free
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.
Nevertheless
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, there are many compelling reasons why some
people
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think that
transport
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facility
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facilities
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should not be given top priority by the authorities.
Such
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people
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believe that other basic amenities like education, environment and
medical
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medicine
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should be the higher priority as they will affect the masses. And if better medical facilities are provided in government hospitals
then
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people
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will not have to splurge their money in private hospitals.
Similarly
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, education is one
such
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area which should not be ignored. In conclusion, the government should keep investing in
this
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area to make transportation easily available and affordable
while
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taking care of other departments too.

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task response
Provide specific examples to support your points
coherence and cohesion
There is a good use of linking words, but the organization can be improved for better coherence
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • traffic congestion
  • reliance
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable development
  • conservation efforts
  • pollution
  • traffic jams
  • sustainability
  • urban living
  • prioritizing
  • environmental protection
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