More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of these problems

in
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In
the
contamporary
characteristic of the present
contemporary
era, there is a heated argument over the issue that some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation and
also
other people believe that these events are a large unjustifiable expense.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
totally agree to the statement given in question
beacusea
for the reason that; on account of
because
lions share
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the lions share
a lions share
of society favours
however
the rest go averse it.
the
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The
following paragraph would highlight my personal prediction along with suitable example
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do not see eye to eye with the central idea for various
reason
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reasons, first
reasons first
first
and foremost reason people want to see sports an
differnet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
sporting events
to get
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getting
the
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
to show the other nation about our country.
therefore all
Accept comma addition
Therefore, all
Therefore all
the famous countries like
pakistan india
Accept comma addition
Pakistan, India
Pakistan india
Pakistan India
pakistan India
england
a division of the United Kingdom
England
and so many others want to show the
abilty
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
to other countries that our country is
safe place
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a safe place
for
thats
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that's
sporting events.
adding
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Adding
further
Accept comma addition
further, for
for
example if
Accept comma addition
example, if
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
arrange the sporting
evnts
something that happens at a given place and time
events
in our country the other comes to join the events. i think some time expense dost'nt metter

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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