In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In Vietnam, after graduating from high

school

, students will start to go to

university

immediately but

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immediately, but

students in many other countries try themselves by working or travelling for one

year

. Nowadays, taking a gap

year

is a popular trend and it has some advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do

this

. It comes without saying that young people can do a lot helpful tasks for themselves in a gap

year

. Obviously, after graduating from high

school

, some young people do not really know what they want to do, what they want to be. While they try doing a job or travelling several places, they have a chance to get life experience and to understand how the society runs, from that they can find out the targets of their lives.

Besides

, young people can learn various skills and knowledge that they have never learnt in

school

such

as staffs have to smile and say sorry even if customers are wrong. On the other hands, taking a break before starting to go

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to, university

university

also

brings some disadvantages for young people. Students

may forgot

Suggestion

may forget

knowledge which is learnt in

school but

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school, but

very useful for

university

studies, so they have to spend a lot of time reviewing it again.

Moreover

, young people do not have much money, even if they have a job because companies can’t pay much for high

school

students who have lack and knowledge.

Therefore

, it will take them more time to depend on their parents’ sponsorship (their sponsors) which not any young people want. In conclusion, some people encourage students to work or travel for a

year

between

Suggestion

Between

finishing high

school

and starting

university

studies but

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studies, but

that has both pros and cons. It is an individual decision that young people should consider the targets that they want to achieve in the future

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cultural immersion
Life experience
Work ethic
Career readiness
Self-discovery
Delayed gratification
Intellectual stagnation
Financial implications
Social dynamics
Academic trajectory

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