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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Over the
last
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 few years, curfews have been quite common in major cities across the globe. Few cities in the United States where
curfew
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the curfew
a curfew
 is imposed, Juveniles are not permitted to go out
in
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at
 night after a certain time without being accompanied by majors. In my opinion,
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 is justified because the motto is to protect teenagers at all times. Keeping teenagers confined to home during
curfew period
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the curfew period
curfew periods
 can protect teenagers from being involved in crimes. Ex-criminals attract youngsters to
committ
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
 crime and other activities which might be considered as unsafe for them.
For instance
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, an article published in
New York times
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the New York times
 revealed that
crime rate
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the crime rate
 by adults increased significantly in few dangerous areas and
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 is because, the teens
are not mature
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are not maturing
 to understand the consequences
.
Accept space
.
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, the youngsters accompanied by
adolscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
 can be considered as a safe activity as it might not be easy for rapists to approach them.
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 can reduce the chance of sexual attacks on minors.
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, in the U.
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 and many other
countries it
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countries, it
 is reported that sexual attacks on young girls increased significantly in 2018 as they were not accompanied by parents. In
conlcusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
although
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this
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 curfew might be put additional burden on the police department, these limitations are necessary as
this
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 can prevent the boys and girls from any unsafe activities and behaviour.
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