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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often said by a few people that providing the voluntary services
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 as working with charities etc.., must be mandatory for high school students. Taking part in volunteering is definitely advantages in the student's growth. For
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 reason,
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 essay will agree with the given statement and give two valid points to support the given idea.
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, voluntary service will enable pupils to enhance their soft skills which are essential to build a harmonious society. Our world requires humans who are empathetic and willing to work together as a team to resolve the matters during conflicts.
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, A president of a nation is expected to be having empathy to be able to serve the country in a better way, knowing the needs of people, and
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 he should be working with other people who are under him as a team and resolve the issues.
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, with volunteering students will learn the importance of teamwork and appreciation of other's views.
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, extracurricular activities set one apart from the others who are applying for the
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 level education. Those who are wishing to pursue under-graduation in prestigious universities should be outstanding among a thousand of applicants because universities will have a dime a dozen grades in the application forms, they have received, in
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 cases, community service will be an add on privilege.
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, I have served to less fortunate children to learn a language and
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 has helped me to enrol in a good under-graduation institution. In conclusion, since pupil thrive to grow in aspects
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 as education and personal, it is essential that they should go one step beyond and help others.
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, schools must add volunteering into their curriculum which will not only help students build a mere perfect personality and character, but
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 make the community a better place.

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