Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Utilizing free time gives
enormous amount
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an enormous amount
of benefit to any
child especially
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child, especially
for their overall development in terms of both physical and mental refreshment. While some believe that parents ought to support children to learn how to occupy on their own. I,
however
, stand by the point that children need to be encouraged by the parents to participate in
group
activities. On the one hand, Parents who encourage children to be on their own say that for a
child
to grow it is necessary to be individualistic.
This
is true that a
child
can learn a lot of new things by reading a book which can give them
vast amount
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the vast amount
a vast amount
of knowledge as well as insights of subject matter in depth.
In addition
to
this
, children can apply the wisdom obtained from the reading to develop new ideas and experiment the same.
For example
, by reading academic books children develop
good understanding
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a good understanding
with which they can develop new ideas and techniques for the same problem to solve in a better way.
However
, those children who are encouraged to participate in
group
activities by parents have higher probability to develop better
inter-personal
occurring among or involving several people
interpersonal
communication skills. A research says that by involving in
group
activities aid in the development of leadership capabilities and decision making ability.
For instance
, children who play cricket have to take decision often which makes them more confident in real life scenario.
Furthermore
, children understand the value of helping each other and to be supportive at times of troubles and triumphs which is considered the most important benefit of
group
activities. In conclusion,
although
a
child
can occupy themselves by reading a book or experimenting themselves, in my opinion
group
activities provide us
with better overall development
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with, the better overall development
with the better overall development
in
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of
key skills needed for life which can help
in
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with
long term. So parents should encourage their children to participate more in
group
activities rather than to leave them on their own.
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  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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