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Human cloning is today turning into one of the hottest issues in the world and while it has attracted many supporters, there are still people who disapprove of this modern science. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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With the fast pace of technology, human able to
made
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make
 successfully genetically improved species. Human replica is
most agruable issue
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a most agreeable issue
most agreeable issue
the most agreeable issue
 in recent years, while some people are in the favour
to
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of
 it,
however
 others are opponent of human cloning.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the statement and give
reason
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reasons
 why the need of
genetically modified
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a genetically modified cell
the genetically modified cell
cell
 of human in
future
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the future
. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of reasons why to necessity of human cloning.
Firstly
, it is useful for those people that are suffering with infertility. Nowadays, IVFs
is
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are
 in practise to combat with infertility issues.
Secondly
, it will play a vital role in organ transplant. People who suffer with their organ problems are will be cured by transplant the organs from human replica.
Furthermore
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Furthermore, cell
cell
 cloning will be
assist
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assisting
 the scientist to improve
selective human trait
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a selective human trait
 and alter
human genome
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the human genome
human genomes
 to eliminate disorder in DNA, it will surely help in the treatment of severe diseases
such
 as cancer and AIDS.
For instance
, experiments has carried out by
researcher
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researchers
the researcher
a researcher
 in
onco genes
a gene that disposes normal cells to change into cancerous tumor cells
oncogenes
 to delete the gene
squence
serial arrangement in which things follow in logical order or a recurrent pattern
sequence
sequences
 which is responsible for cancer.
Hence
,
cell
 cloning
wiil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 have a great future in the way of
usefullness
the quality of being of practical use
usefulness
 to human welfare.
In contrast
, whether individual cloning has many advantages
.
Accept space
.
though
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Though
 its cons will
no
negation of a word or group of words
not
 be denied. There will be chances of premature aging issues, as the
cell
 will use to make a clone of the mature human and
also
 leads to
premeture
born after a gestation period of less than the normal time
premature
 death.
Moreover
genetical
 modification
interfere
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interferes
 with
natural process
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the natural process
natural processes
 of embryo formation that will cause ethical issue. People
are strictly oppose
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are strictly opposed
are strictly opposing
strictly oppose
 cloning as it
trying
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tries
is trying
 to alter the natural process of reproduction. To conclude the statement, there would be
the wide
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wider
 benefits of human cloning in
future
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the future
. It would be true to say that cons of human
cloing
a general term for the research activity that creates a copy of some biological entity (a gene or organism or cell)
cloning
is
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are
 negligible in the front of
wide scope
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the wide scope
 of
cell
 cloning to human welfare in coming years.

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