As there is increasing unemployment in the world, while at the same time those who have jobs are working harder and harder, it would be better to have a four-day working week for everyone, and so to create more jobs. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

Concerned at
rising rate
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the rising rate
of unemployed proportion of
society economists
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society, economists
and social scientists are becoming increasingly concerned and have been pitching for new revolutionary ways to number of jobless people. They suggest that it would viable enough if some arrangements could be made within existing capacity like reducing
number
Suggestion
the number
of working days per
week
as it would help create openings for jobless. But
this
notion is strongly by many sections as they feel
this
is impractical. People who support the
idea
of reducing
number
Suggestion
the number
of working days per
week
suggest that by stipulating 4 day
week
working per person would help generate employment as employers will be forced to seek more people to compensate for workers on rest days.
Besides
using existing set-up,
this
would always be a better
idea
as
this
will be done without governments having to plan and impose more burdens on already sulking economies. Authorities will be able to focus on other more critical economic issues that need to be solved to remove
malady
Suggestion
the malady
of unemployment.
On the contrary
, some sections strongly reject
this
idea
as it would impose an additional burden on employers.
This
would have an adverse impact on
financial health
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the financial health
of existing employment venues as employment giving agencies will have to shell out extra money to pay salaries to new employees, bear
additional tax burden
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the additional tax burden
additional tax burdens
an additional tax burden
and additional infrastructure costs to accommodate additional workers.
This
would reduce
capacity
Suggestion
the capacity
of businesses to sustain profitability in
face
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the face
of stiff market
competition which
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competition, which
could
also
result in closing down of businesses.
This
would
further
amplify miseries and create more jobless people. In conclusion, I strongly reject
this
idea
as enforcing a four
working day
Suggestion
day working week
week
is quite impractical as it may generate more serious issues and create more unemployed people.
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