We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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Computers

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are a relatively new invention. The first

computers

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were built fifty years ago and it is only in the

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thirty or so years that their influence has affected our everyday life. Personal

computers

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were introduced as recently as the early eighties. In

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they have made a tremendous impact on our lives. We are now so dependent on

computers

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that it is hard to imagine what things would be like today without them. You have only got to go into a bank when their main computer is broken to appreciate the chaos that would occur if

computers

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were suddenly removed

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. In the future

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will be used to create bigger and even more sophisticated

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. The prospects for

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are quite alarming. They will be so complex that no individual could hope to understand how they work. They will bring a lot of benefits but they will

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increase the potential for unimaginable chaos. They will,

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, be able to fly planes and they will be able to

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the movements of several planes in the vicinity of an airport. Providing all the

computers

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are working correctly nothing can go wrong. If one small program fails — disaster. There is a certain inevitability that technology will progress and become increasingly complex. We should,

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, ensure that we are still in a position where we are able to control technology. It will be all too easy to suddenly discover that technology is controlling us. By

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it might be too late I believe that it is very important to be suspicious of the benefits that

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will bring and to make sure that we never become totally dependent on a completely technological world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

289 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Autonomous vehicles
Smart traffic management
AI (Artificial Intelligence)
Machine learning
Personalized treatment
Virtual classrooms
AI tutors
Smart homes
Energy consumption
Grocery shopping automation
Data analysis
Decision-making assistance
Efficiency
Mainstream adoption
Predictive algorithms
Personalization

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Which of the following factors is the most important when deciding to get a job? Choose one of the options below and provide specific reasons or examples. Location The opportunity to learn various work skills The possibility of a long-term career: Có khả năng làm việc lâu dài

Some people think that the best way to learn about business is to study a course at college or university. Others believe that there are other better ways to learn about business.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreing language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is • say what happened the last times you complained • explain what you want the manager to do.