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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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My country is definitely not the only one that hav
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Suggestion
has
ny unemployed youngsters, who are highly qualified.
That is
 a
problem
 happening all around the world. One major factor about it is that these graduates have no enough experience about coping with stressful situations and dealing with problems of their everyday lives. Even if they have been studying in an elite university they have only extended their knowledge and that’s all. I suggest having more lectures about real life and its difficulties. Another factor is that most of the companies have a staff with people working for them for years, so that they don’t want changes in order to prevent any jeopardy. The solution is clear - companies have to become more open to young people because they are those who would make the world a modern one. A vital factor causing
this
problem
 could be the personality. Youngsters are surrounded by technology
that is
 able to make them less creative and more identical to each other. If employers seek someone who is original and unique, maybe that’s the biggest
problem
.
However
, it is not hard to resolve - graduates would just have to show these qualities that make them different. In conclusion, I think that both employers and graduates have to find a way to solve
this
 big
problem
 causing troubles in many countries, because young people are those who have to show their capacity to the world. We should give them a chance and see what they are capable of.

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