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Education in prison is the best way to reduce crime as prisoners will be able to get job after leaving the prison. Do you agree or disagree

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Education
 is an integral part of human
life
. Many people believe that an effective method of crime reduction is to educate the people who live in prison so that, they are able to lead a respectful
life
.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of
education
 in building a crime free nation.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
It is a common scenario for people to engage in illegal activities as a means of living. Many people who due to the lack of
education
 due to various reasons
such
 as poverty, get involved in criminal groups in very early stages of
life
. They consider breaking rules as
a
Suggestion
an
 easy means of earning huge amount of money.
For example
, a research found that many prisoners felt that lack of
education
 and a proper job forced them to enter criminal world and if given a chance they would leave crime.
Therefore
,
education
 has an important role in reforming prisoners.
Moreover
,
education
 is important for
development
Suggestion
the development
 of thinking and personality of an individual. Reading books
allows
Suggestion
allow
 people to think rationally about decisions they make in everyday
life
 and the impact of it is consequences.
Besides
, the educational qualification can help them secure jobs.
Thus
, they are able to live
normal
Suggestion
a normal life
life
 for themselves
qnd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 their families. To sum up, in order to live
respectful
Suggestion
a respectful life, it
a respectful life it
life
 it is necessary for an individual to be educated and be able to earn for himself. And in my opinion prisoners should be given facility to read and learn and a chance to live with
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
.
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