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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. ​ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Every human being is born with
equal
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an equal right
right
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 to life and basic standard of living. Rights can be divided into
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 and
second
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 generation of human rights, the former cover
right
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 to life and dignity and equal representation in
political sphere
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the political sphere
 of life, while, the latter secures equal
right
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 to
education
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 for all without any discrimination based on their gender, religion, caste or
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
. There are certain international legal instruments which protect equal
education
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 for all,
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, in our current
education
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system there
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system, there
 are certain areas of study in which men are preferred more
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 women and have
more number
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a number
number
the number
 of seats
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 to those of female students.
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 is because there is a notion or stereotype that women after marriage and children would not be able to work in a particular field.
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 discrimination against female students tend to restrict their
right
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 to
education
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 and future career paths. In order to change
this
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 situation and secure the fundamental
right
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 of female students there should be certain laws which would compel educational institutions to provide equal seats to both genders.
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 would not only protect the rights of female students but equal representation in various fields will
also
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 help
economy
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the economy
 of the country and people in general as the number of skilled and educated people will increase. To conclude, it can be said that
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right
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the right
 to equal
education
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 is the fundamental
right
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 of every human being which is protected by various national and international laws,
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, all the educational institutions must provide equal seats to both genders.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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