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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss Advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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Computer based learning is now becoming an integral part of education. Every educational institutes have modern computer labs or allow students to carry their personal computers which enables the student to note down lessons, conduct research and enable them to work smartly. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will be discussing the pros and cons of integrating computers with
current education system
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the current education system
. The main advantage of having computers is that the it provides the student with better outreach of the vast knowledge the Internet offers than spend hours researching about a single topic from various books. With AI based
learning growing
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learning, growing
 day by day, many educational applications are available online which offers visual videos or online lectures covering
wide range
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a wide range
 of topics.
This
 helps students to learn and retain information faster than traditional methods of reading books and understanding concepts with little guidance. The disadvantage of computer based learning
is it
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is, it
 may hamper the way children learns to think and solve problems on their own. With ready answers available on the Internet or the computer performing quick calculations, children tend to use computers as a shortcut to
hardwork
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hard work
 and understanding the concepts.
Moreover children
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Moreover, children
 are becoming less creative and rely on computers to do the work for them rather than thinking up an idea on their own. In my opinion, the pros of computers outweigh the cons when it
coming
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comes
is coming
 to learning. Students will learn and develop more quickly and it does cut back a lot of manual work for both the students and the faculty.

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