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Rich countries should not employ skilled labor from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that trained workers from destitute nations should not be recruited by the affluent nations as these impoverished states require these peoples more. I disagree with
this
 statement as I believe that controlled recruitment of nationals of these underprivileged nations can be a win-win situation for both the countries. Recruitment of educated unemployed immigrants from penurious countries in a controlled manner is good for poor countries as it not only gives employment to its citizens and but
also
 brings in money in the form of inward remittances. Developing countries like India and China are abundant in human resources where millions of people are unemployed while
developed nation
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the developed nation
such
 as the United States of America and Japan are opulently wealthy and need a workforce for the industries. In
this
 way, both these nations complement each other in capital and
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
. Another advantage of an approach in which developing nations retain critical workers for their economy and have a strategic tie-up with developed nations to train and employ their citizens, who will ultimately turn into a productive citizen
who while
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who, while
 working
overseas send
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overseas, send
home
that male; objective male pronoun
him
 money and on return, they shall bring in necessary skill set to help develop their home nations.
For example
, unemployed skilled IT graduates from India relocated to the United States for employment purposes in the late 90s and later many of them moved back to India after gaining expertise and skills to set up successful mega ventures
such
 as Flipkart, Ola, and Snapdeal. To recapitulate, recruiting skilled professionals by rich nations from resource-poor countries in a supervised should be encouraged for the benefit of both nations especially of poor countries.

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