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Many people these days have computer, laptop and telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantage or disadvantage?

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Using computers and smart phones at
home
 for
work
 purposes is a double-edged
sward
a cutting or thrusting weapon that has a long metal blade and a hilt with a hand guard
sword
. It has advantages and drawbacks.
Most important advantage
Suggestion
The most important advantage
 of having access to
work
in
Suggestion
at
from
home
 is helping people whom
thier
of them or themselves
their
work
 tasks need
longe
primarily temporal sense; being or indicating a relatively great or greater than average duration or passage of time or a duration as specified
long
longer
time
 to finish.
Instead
 of staying
in
Suggestion
at
work
 to finish these tasks,
employee
Suggestion
the employee
 can go back
home
 and resume his
work
.
Furthermore
, some jobs may require working even during weekend. Having an access through computers
in
Suggestion
at
home
 will make life way easier
.
Accept space
.
 One of the drawbacks of having access to
work
in
Suggestion
at
from
home
, it may lead to
work
/ life imbalance.
Person
Suggestion
A person
 may spend more
time
 in working and that will lead to less
time
 to spend with his family. Not only
this
,
Accept space
,
 if he spends more
time
 in using computers for
work
, that may lead to health problems as well. Stress and less sleep hours will lead to negative impact. In my opinion, if
person
Suggestion
a person
people
 can use the advantage of having computers for accessing
work
 in
apprpopriate way
Suggestion
appropriate ways
appropriate way
an appropriate way
 without affecting his family and healthy aspects.
it
Suggestion
It
 will be of great help and
benfiet
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
benefits
.
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