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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Middle aged people in several countries are becoming increasingly disinterested in reading newspapers or watching
daily news
Suggestion
the daily news
 on
televsion
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
.
This
 is due to several reasons
such
 as advancement in
internet
 technology and non-availability of print media. These challenges can be resolved if programs geared towards the youths are featured and money is provided to sustain media houses. Perhaps
seem
perceive by sight or have the power to perceive by sight
seen
same
 as the most important reason for lack of interest by young
people in watching
Suggestion
people watching
 television and reading
news
Suggestion
the news
 from physical papers is the advancement made in
internet
 technology. Youths are generally known to be upward and mobile and the
internet
 presents a veritable source of
information
 with all news available
on
Suggestion
at
 a click,
this
 is
in contrast
 to the aforementioned sources of
information
 that are not fast and mobile when it comes to passing across
information
.
For
example in
Accept comma addition
example, in
 cases of
emegencies
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergencies
such
 as earthquakes, real time situation reports can be obtained faster online when compared to the traditional means of media.
Besides
, Most companies that specialise in newspaper production and TV
boroadcast
message that is transmitted by radio or television
broadcasts
 are folding up due to low patronage thereby leading to lack of funds to sustain the business.
Hence
 those who usually rely on these as source of
information
 are
soucing
diligent and thorough in inquiry or investigation
searching
sourcing
 for alternatives. A study carried out in 2016 showed a 20 and 25 percent reduction in the number of Stations and publishing
house respectively
Accept comma addition
house, respectively
 when compared to what was obtained a decade ago.
However
, the trend and be turned around by improving
on
Suggestion
in
 the
information
 available in news magazines and TV shows. Young men and women are generally known to love sports and if more
sport features
Accept comma addition
sport, features
 are encouraged in these means of communication, youths will certainly get endeared.
In addition
, The government could
also
 assist by providing grants and giving tax waivers help support the media industry,
this
 will encourage more
inovations
a creation (a new device or process) resulting from study and experimentation
innovations
innovation
renovations
 that will seek for better ways of attracting teenagers. Conclusively, the improvements made in
internet
 technology combined with low funding
has resulted
Suggestion
have resulted
 in
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in the number youths reading newspapers or watching TV.
Notwithstanging
Suggestion
Notwithstanding
,
this
 can be resolved if the contents of media houses are reviewed to attract middle aged people and funding is made available to sustain the traditional media industry.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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