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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Every
years
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year
, a large number of
graduates graduate
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graduates, graduate
 from institutions who are
expereinced
having experience; having knowledge or skill from observation or participation
experienced
 in various works of life.
However
, there is high
unemployment which
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unemployment, which
 makes many qualified graduates to be unemployed and roaming the streets of their countries. Some of the reasons of high unemployment of qualified graduates can be, the government of the country that
care less
marked by lack of attention or consideration or forethought or thoroughness; not careful
careless
 of the graduates
there by
by that means or because of that
thereby
 making employment in companies or factories scare. Instance, the government officials give appointments to their relatives not minding if they are capable of doing the job
available whereas
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available, whereas
 there are people they are capable of working and yet there is no one to help them get the jobs. Another reason is, despite that there are some qualified graduates, most of them can not defend the results they get from the institutions they attended. Some institutions may focus on the theory aspects of some courses leaving out the practical aspect which is more important. Instance, some graduates are inadequate because they cannot explore what they have
learnt
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learned
 in the school.
Finally
, some companies have horrifying job requirements for employees. Instance, where the employer needs people that have four years experience in that field, the applicant is a recent graduate. In conclusion, there is expected that the government, society which involves the employers in various companies or factories to step up their games and give chances to employers that are qualified for their jobs to reduce unemployment in our countries.

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