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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information is relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Employers often ask
job
 seekers about their personal
information
 like marital status, leisure interests during
job
 interviews. Some think these types of questions are helpful in the hiring
process whereas
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process, whereas
 others believe
this
 is irrelevant. While
such
 details are helpful in the recruitment procedure, I think human resource managers should know
this
information
 as it helps them in the selection of the right candidates for the post. On the one hand, the recruitment department must get personal
information
 from people.
This
 enables an employer to have in-depth knowledge of prospective employees. Some jobs demand long working hours, frequent
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 and to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 these
criteria it
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criteria, it
 is essential to have personal
information
of
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about
 people.
For example
, the ministry of human resources of states conducted a survey which showed that employers who collected personal details of people during the
job
 interview have a 50 % less attrition rate in their organization. I believe managers should have personal details of their workforce as it helps them to design jobs.
On the other hand
,
job
 aspirant’s personal
information
such
 as hobbies, extra curriculum interests is not at all require as
this
 will not of any use.
Instead
 of
this
, people should ask for their
job
-specific experiences and skills.
This
 kind of
information
 is beneficial in the selection procedure and helps the employer in recruiting the right person.
For instance
, the Labour Association in the UK published an article that reveals the fact that
job
-specific
information
 of employees proves more important than their details.
However
, I think a worker's personal interests should take into consideration. In conclusion, some would argue that the recruitment cell should collect personal details of
job
 applicants. Others believe
this
information
 is not important. Employers should know their future employee’s likes and dislikes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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