Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Life is all about ups and downs.
people
Suggestion
People
often face to many problematic circumstances in life. Some people go through the worst condition like
unsatisfactory job
Suggestion
an unsatisfactory job
or shortage of money by accepting it, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
believe in fighting back and try to progress
such
unfortunate
situation
. Personally, I completely agree with the
second
view. On the one hand, it sounds good saying for improving
bad condition
Suggestion
the bad condition
,
however
, evolving is not so easy. Person have to embed every single
things
Suggestion
thing
;
Accept space
;
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
they have to start from beginning.
yet
Suggestion
Yet
, the improvement can't be assured. For that reason, people tend to continue with the disappointing
situation
.
On the other hand
, persist with bad conditions is not
relaible way
Suggestion
a reliable way
reliable way
to handle the obstacles of life. We need to work for it
;
Accept space
;
we can just examine, analyse or evaluate the
situation
to find finest solution. There are many ways to conquer it, like, if you are
unpleased
with the work
;
Accept space
;
you can go for
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
job option,
however
, it's
preety
to a moderately sufficient extent or degree
pretty
difficult to get one instantly. But,
the more harder
Suggestion
the harder
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
try
then
the more success
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
get.
For instance
, in my
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, there was a student who was born in a poor family, his parents were farmers and did not have enough money to pay for fees if he had gone to the university. It was admirable that he
try
Suggestion
tries
his best in study and gained the scholarship of his
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
university and became an official student. After that, by his efforts every day, when he graduated, he became a professional doctor as he desired and has earned a lot of money per month. Thence, he and his parents have had a
more wonderful
Suggestion
most wonderful
life with adequate convenience. All in all, as the perception varies from person to person; so way of tackling the
situation
also
totally depend on individual believes. But, I prefer trying
hard
Suggestion
harder
to improve bad condition rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
staying in it because
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
is the key to success.

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