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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that
employees
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 should have a shorter working
week
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 and longer holidays.
However
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, I firmly disagree with
this
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 view because it can negatively affect
companies
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’
revenue
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 and create serious problems in workplace management.
Firstly
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, giving
employees
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 a shorter working
week
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 can significantly reduce company
revenue
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. If governments introduce regulations that limit working days,
companies
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 will have fewer opportunities to operate and generate income.
This
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 situation is particularly harmful for businesses that rely on daily productivity,
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 as manufacturing and service industries.
For example
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, in Indonesia, some
companies
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 have complained about frequent long weekends because reduced working hours lower
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 output.
As a result
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, businesses may struggle to maintain stable
revenue
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, making it difficult to pay
employees
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’ salaries and cover operational costs.
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, a shorter working
week
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 can cause management difficulties, especially in meeting deadlines. In the past,
employees
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 could work overtime when workloads increased.
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, with fewer working days,
companies
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 may be forced to hire additional or temporary workers to complete urgent tasks.
This
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 not only increases recruitment and training costs but can
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 reduce work efficiency.
For instance
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, a private company in Salatiga often hires freelancers to meet tight deadlines
instead
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 of employing full-time staff.
Although
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 freelancers are more flexible,
this
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 approach can disrupt teamwork and lower the quality of work. In conclusion,
while
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 longer holidays may help
employees
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 rest and reduce stress, a shorter working
week
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 can create serious challenges for
companies
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. Reduced
revenue
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 and increased management costs make
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 policy impractical for many businesses, particularly in developing countries.

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structure
State your view clearly in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
task response
Mention the other side briefly and give a clear refute.
coherence
Use more signposts to show the flow of ideas.
evidence
Provide more varied examples or data to back up the claims.
grammar
Check grammar and sentence length to avoid long run-on sentences.
conclusion
Finish with a concise summary of your main points.
task response
Clear position is stated and supported by two relevant points.
coherence
Examples are tied to the point (Indonesia, Salatiga).
coherence
Overall flow is logical with basic linking words.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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