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Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone.

#education #health #care #government
Some people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of the government to provide free
education
 and
health
 facilities as they are the basic needs of a person.
However
,
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,
I think that providing free
education
 and medication to all the people is unnecessary
,
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,
especially to the ones who can afford those facilities.
Therefore
, I do not agree with the above statement. It is undeniable that the
education
 is essential and should be made compulsory
to
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for
 all the people.Educated people contribute the most towards the development of the nation and
hence
 everyone should be given access
for
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to
 educating themselves.But I strongly believe that free
education
 should be provided only to the poor
,
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,
illiterate people who cannot afford
education
.
This
 helps in boosting the development of a nation by increasing the literacy rates.
For example
, if free
education
 is provided to all
then
the cardinal number that is the sum of nine and one; the base of the decimal system
ten
 people will not realize its importance and will not focus on the studies as the well known adage says one will never appreciate the value of something when it is easily obtained. Moving on the
health
 facilities I think that it is the responsibility of every individual to look after his/her own
health
.
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An
 educated person will know the importance of his/her
health
 and
therefore
 should maintain it properly.When the government making provisions of free
education providing
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education, providing
 free
health
 facilities as well is not necessary.Everyone should keep themselves fit and take care of their
health
. In conclusion
,
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,
I think government should provide free
education
 and medication only
to
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for
 the poor and needy to ensure the proper use of the facilities provided and help the nation develop by using those funds in other important projects.
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  • fundamental right
  • socioeconomic status
  • equal opportunities
  • financial burden
  • economically disadvantaged
  • public health expenditures
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • waiting times
  • government budgets
  • financial constraints
  • higher taxes
  • reallocation
  • privatization
  • quality services
  • inequality
  • fulfill responsibility
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