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It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Would the drawbacks of such a requirement be greater than the benefits to the community and the individual young adults? Some people suggest to adults that they do unpaid work in their societies. It has many advantage and disadvantages. I will discuss both and I thik drewbacks ourweight merits

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Some people suggest to adults that they do unpaid
work
 in their societies. It has many
advantage
Suggestion
advantages
 and disadvantages. I will discuss both and I
thik
judge or regard; look upon; judge
think
drewbacks
Suggestion
the drawbacks
drawbacks
drawback
ourweight
Suggestion
our weight
 merits
To begin
 with, there are many disadvantages to youth if they do unpaid
work
.
Firstly they
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Firstly, they
 do not focus on their
study
Suggestion
studies
 because most of time on social
work
.
Furthermore
, they do not improve their new technology skill as we as new knowledge because they
bo
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BO
 show their interest in unpaid or social
work
.
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.
Finally they
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Finally, they
 don't complete their basic needs and depends on their parents
Moreso
Suggestion
More so
, it has many
bnitfits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 if they do unpaid
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they will be aware about their societies and improve their communication skills through the many
seminar
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seminars
 related to health and drugs.
In addition
, they meet with new people and inhale their knowledge in different streams. As well as
they
of them or themselves
their
 well responsible. To sum u
p
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,
, drawbacks
ourweigh
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our weight
t merit because in
this
age enjoyabl
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age, enjoyable
e for adult so they do not ready for any
responsibil
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
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