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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree?

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Each
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 has some disrespectful students who create significant disturbances in the decorum of the
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. Many argue, and I fully agree with them that
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 mischievous students should get separate classes because they can influence others with their bad attitude, and would affect their education standards by wasting the
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 of the
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. It has been observed, that the pupils who are not seriously committed to their studies would not behave properly in the classroom.
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, they would tend to whistle-around and disobey their teachers.
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, their carefree attitude would influence many others to join them and enjoy the
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 rather than focusing on their studies. The children are gullible, and can easily be influenced by the bad company.
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, I have seen in my educational career that one
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 obstinate and rebellious student used to influence many others to make a whole gang over a very short
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. Another issue with teaching them with others is that teachers have to spend a significant
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 of the
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 disciplining
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 students. The teacher's
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 is extremely precious, which he or she would utilize explaining the vital concepts of the lesson.
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, their irresponsible attitude would
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 affect the focus of studious children leading to poor understanding and
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 wastage of
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.
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 would result in the deterioration of the overall teaching standards of the
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. To conclude, I firmly believe that
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 disobedient pupils should be separately taught to prevent the waste of
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 and their influence over others. It is
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 recommended that focus should be on their rehabilitation so that they could become a productive part of society
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