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Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter: • give details about the order you made • explain what was wrong with the item • tell the company what you want them to do about it

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Dear Sir,
I’m
 writing to you regarding the Moto E
phone
 that I purchased from your website, but
I’m
 very disappointed as the
phone
 isn’t working. On 21st August, 19 I purchased
this
phone
 which got delivered to me on 26th August, 19. I tried to switch it on but
I’m
 failing to do that every time. Since the day it got delivered
I’m
 trying really hard to make it work but somehow it’s not even switching on. I’ve attached my bill receipt and the order details of
this
phone
 in
this
 mail itself for your reference. I would like you to return back my money or deliver a new
phone
 of the same company & model
on
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 my address. I had a very bad experience with your company. Hope you won’t let down your loyal customer and will surely take
a
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strict action against it soon, as I mentioned
it
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to you above. Yours Faithfully Vaishali
Submitted by vaishalibhardwaj2010 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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