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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In combating
traffic
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trafficking
 and transportation difficulty
,
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,
some humans believe that it is better to live in the suburbs
instead
 of the cities.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 notion because of the numerous opportunities abound in the
city
 and other alternative methods to solve the problem
issues
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Issues
 are meant to be fixed not avoided. If everyone leaves the
city
 because of the Transportation menace,
then
 who stays in the
city
?There are numerous benefits associated with living in the
city
such
 as varieties of industries to work and earn a living
,
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,
beautiful tourist attractions
etcetera
, should we give all up just for
traffic
 situations? . Recent research
concluded revealed
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concluded, revealed
 that there
are over 100% more manufacturing firms in the
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have over 100 % more manufacturing firms in the city than suburbs and people in the city lived
are over 100 % more manufacturing firms in the city than suburbs and people in the city live
city
 than surburbs and people in the
city
 live a better life than suburbs. Alternatively the menace of
traffic
 and transportation can be solved by reducing the number of road users, and the government making provision for a good transport system for the
people which
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people, which
 will go a long way in reducing the number of vehicles on the road and
thus
Traffic
.
For instance
 it was reported in Abuja, Nigeria where there is a Train system
,
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,
 that the number of road users and
traffic
 reduced by 30%.
Furthermore
, pollution will be drastically reduced as less fumes will be emitted from the exhaust pipes of vehicles which will
further
 lessen carbon monoxide poisoning and
therefore
 healthy populace
.
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.
 In conclusion
,
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,
people do not have to migrate to suburbs to solve
traffic
 and transportation issues if other alternative solutions can be sought after and considering the abundance of opportunities that can be tapped in the cities.
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