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Many doctors are concerned about the high use of computer games by children and young people. What mental and physical problems may arise from excessive use of these games? How could these problems be reduced?

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An increased use of computer games by children and young people is a concern of a lot of doctors. There are a number of both mental and physical problems that may arise from the excessive use of computer games and it will be explained in the following paragraphs including the ways to address
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 issues. In terms of mental aspect, becoming so exposed to these digital games could lead to being addictive and lazy. People who play
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 games tend to become addicted and they end up spending most of their
time
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 on these games,
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 they have less
time
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 and feel lazy to do some other task.
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, a kid may be spending 4 to 6 hours of their
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 playing and they run out of
time
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 for some other things or they become lazy to do so. Concerning physical factors, the concerned individuals will become more sedentary with their lifestyles which could affect their health.
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, these people would prefer staying at home and enjoy their games and would be too idle to be involved with outdoor or physical activities that promote
healthy lifestyle
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healthy lifestyles
a healthy lifestyle
. One thing that could help address
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 issue is for the schools to promote activities or organizations that involve physical activities in school. In
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 way, these people will have an
alotment
a share set aside for a specific purpose
allotment
 for physical activities which somehow reduce some of their
time
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 on computer games and digital world. In conclusion, too much exposure to digital games greatly affect both mental and physical aspect
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,
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 activities in schools could help reduce and solve theses issues.

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