Some parents think children should have mobile phones , others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #children #phones

In modern technical era

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a segment of society

think

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thinks

that mobile phones are necessary for children

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;

whilst opponents opine that there is no need of mobile phones for children. I believe that mobile phones are not better of juveniles which I will discuss in

upcoming paragraphs

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the upcoming paragraphs

To begin

with the reasons that why mobile phones are essential

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First

of all, mobile phones are

good source

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a good source

of communication between a child and parents.

For instance

, during the job time parents can communicate with their child and

also

can check the location of their juvenile

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Moreover

, according to recent

survey 40

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survey, 40

per cent children

Tue Sep 03 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

106 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some parents think children should have mobile phones , others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries has a positive affect; others say it could contribute to a loss of the country's identities. Do you agree or disagree

You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organizer of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organizer of the meeting and include: -Details about the meeting -The problem you face -What should be done

living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as parctical problems. to what extent do you agree or dis agree with this statement

Do you agree or disagree with different jobs for men and women?