Some parents think children should have mobile phones , others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In modern technical era
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a segment of society
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that mobile phones are necessary for children
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whilst opponents opine that there is no need of mobile phones for children. I believe that mobile phones are not better of juveniles which I will discuss in
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To begin
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First
of all, mobile phones are
good source
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a good source
of communication between a child and parents.
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, during the job time parents can communicate with their child and
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can check the location of their juvenile
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Moreover
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survey, 40
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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