You found a problem with the item which you bought it online. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter, you should: • describe the item • explain what the issue is • suggest what you expect the manager to do

More and more
people
move into large
cities
in order to avail
the
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themselves the
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facilities which smaller
cities
don’t provide as much. Larger
cities
have more job opportunities for
people
,
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and provide more health care facilities, more educational facilities, and more entertainment.
However
, as more
people
start moving into large
cities
, the demands of
people
start to outweigh the supply. In Dubai, where I live,
for example
, so many
people
had moved into the city
last
year that there were more
people
and
less
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fewer
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housing units to facilitate them. When the demand becomes more than the supply, the price of everything starts to rise.
Therfore
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Therefore
, the rents started to reach
the
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peaks.
This
forced
people
who
wernt
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weren't
were
able to afford the skyrocketing rents to move into smaller and cheaper apartments, or to go on sharing apartments with one or more families.
Supply demand
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imbalance has
also
caused food to become more expensive, forcing
people
to go for
alternative
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, cheaper products of lower quality.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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