In many countries ,children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do u agree or disagree

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Children are

obess

excessively fat

obese

and unhealthy in many nations and some people

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believes

believed

that government must have the responsibility to solve

this

problem.

However

, l do not fully agree

Suggestion

with

that view, parents

also

have

responsiblity

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

for maintaining health of children.

First

of all, the children are getting chubby and unhealthy because of

vast use

Suggestion

the vast use

of junk foods and it is

also

very dangerous to

health

Accept comma addition

health, for

for example

, many studies proved that many children are becoming overweight by the use of junk foods.So parents have the main

responsiblity

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

for making

children

Suggestion

the children

healthy by controlling them from eating these type of

fooda

any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue

foods

Tue Sep 03 2019

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Introduction & conclusion present

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In many countries ,children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do u agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

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